Learning Outcome Two

When I reflect back on how I used sources as evidence, I immediately think of the progress from my  free draft of my second essay to my final draft of it. In my first essay of the semester, I would say something like “he mentions the example, “[i]f… house prices are routinely described as climbing and climbing, higher and higher, people might naturally assume that that rise is unstoppable (Geary)”. Whereas in my second essay, I would try to elaborate and relate more. This is seen on the top of page five of my final version  of the second essay when I say “[s]imilarly, Lehrer mentions how “[d]ancers can help untangle connections between the body and emotion” which is an artist approach.'” I also notice that I provided a better summary of the pieces I would introduce in my second essay. I know that in my free draft of the first essay, I did not provide a summary at all and it definitely makes a difference to have one! It is important to familiarize your reader with the pieces being used as evidence. Lastly, it is clear that I improved in the explanation of my essays. My second essay provides more of my own understandings and connections to the text with less summary.