Learning Outcome One

At the beginning of the semester, I was really only focusing on local edits which is what we would practice in high school. We were introduced to global edits during the first essay round but I was not completely confident with making them or suggesting them to others. By the second round, I had a better handle on it. When I compare my first draft second english essay to the final draft I  notice a lot of global and local revisions that definitely improved the overall quality of it. When looking back on my global edits, I notice that I combined the last two paragraphs in my essay. I feel that they were not strong enough to support my thesis on their own. Together, these ideas came together and created a great flow. I also removed Pinker from my second paragraph as his ideas were not significant enough to include in that paragraph. Lastly, I changed the order of my paragraphs by moving my naysayer to be the third paragraph rather than fourth. I feel that this helped the flow of my paper. After completing my global revisions, I began working on the local revisions. I read the paper aloud and changed any grammar, spelling or punctuation that was not correct. As a whole, I feel that I have had significant development in engaging in global and local revisions.